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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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There was a lengthy discussion of whether
video
 games are more beneficial or harmful among people. I purpose that every coin has two sides, including
video
 games if we could use it properly. The main argument of approving that
video
 games are conducive and advantageous is that
this
 could promote our abilities of creativity, imagining and response. There are varieties of
video
 game topics,
such
 as race car (rally),
first
-character shooting and puzzle-solving. In these
game
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games
, especially in puzzle games, it could not only consolidate some knowledge we learnt
already but
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already, but
also enhance
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also enhances
 our ability to make a strategy after anatomising problem.
Furthermore
, playing
video
 games is
also
 a tool to communicate with their friends. Imagine that our children might be isolated if other students play a specific but our children not. It is beneficial for children who do not recognise English words to play the word maze.
On the other hand
, drawbacks
on
Suggestion
of
to
 playing
video
 games are significantly obverse. Affecting academic performance for students, impeding
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
 and losing social ability in the real world are both parts of disadvantage which might be caused by
games
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the games
.
Firstly
, the main target for students is studying, while playing too much
video
 games might distract their
attentions
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attention
 on studying, and it is
also
 evidently right for a working man.
Secondly
, spending too much time on it generates a pressing environment for our eyes.
As a result
, the ocular disease is more likely to occur on them.
Lastly
, compared to beneficial counterpart I mentioned, playing overtime is likely to deplete their ability to chat with others and difficult to discriminate which worlds are real life.
This
 will dramatically affect our healthy
life no
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life, no
 matter for student or adult. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh drawbacks.
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