Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?

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Today the world is facing more
violence
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than ever before. There are different causes of hostilities among nations, people and societies. I believe, social injustice and poverty are the most common cause of
violence
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;
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, some people would argue that the media is the main promoter of
violence
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. There is no doubt that
media
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the media
does play a role in spreading hate and crime to some extent. The contents of the movies and the other TV programs are somewhat provoking toward
violence
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;
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, the media is not the main cause behind all the hostilities in our society. There is no
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example, where it can be justified that people who have more access to media are more violent as compared to the others. The fundamental causes of
violence
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are hidden within our societies. Poverty and injustice are two main factors that lead to violent
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. A good example would be a comparison between the societies of the developed and developing countries. The crime ratio is way higher in
third
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world countries as compared to developed countries. When people are jobless and they have no source of income they would rob banks or even kill people for money.
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west have
better judicial system
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a better judicial system
as compared to developing countries. It is
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an important factor behind less
violence
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and less
crimes
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crime
in the west. When people have no hopes from their justice system,
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tend to take the law into their own hands. Which leads to crimes
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as murders, and sometimes even terrorism. By looking at the above examples, it is clearly understood that poverty and injustice lead to
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in the society. The media
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are also involved
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involved in provoking
violence
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in the society, but not to the extent as
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.
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