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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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It is argued that the companies are hiring employees by their appearance rather than their ability
of
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to
work
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, I strongly disagree with the statement and I am going to discuss about it in detail in the essay.
First
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 of all we all have to consider one thing in mind the every
company
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 has their own goals to achieve at the end of the day for that reason they hiring peoples, for
instant
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the instant
 a customer care
company
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 employee who is working on a customer care desk should have sound
knowledge
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 of the
company
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 information in order to deal with customers who walks in and looking to get their
meet
the flesh of animals (including fishes and birds and snails) used as food
meat
, being well dressed with empty
knowledge
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 is not going to meet customer satisfaction.
At
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In
On
 a long run every
company
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 targeting their revenue they only consider about it not the employees appearance and dresses.
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example people
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example, people
 working in IT
Company
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have
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has
 the
knowledge
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 of software codes and so on; at
this
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 point
company
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 will look for a person with the
knowledge
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 in the particular field to deal with the task has given by
company
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, by the appearance of a person nothing is going to
work
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 with the
company
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 revenue in the specific field and they won’t even consider being smart by look rather they
work
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 smart to finish the task on time with accuracy. To
conclude I
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conclude, I
 strongly believe in
smartness
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the smartness
 of
work
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instead
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 of being
showing
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shown
 off being well dressed without
knowledge
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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