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Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that?

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In general, the most professionals jobs are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 given to men, as they are stronger than women in all aspects. Some people believe that the administration must provide companies to hire men rather than more women.
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement given above. They should give equal opportunity to both groups, and the ladies are criticized by another group.
First
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 of all, men and women have the same rights in all aspects.
Therefore
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, the women
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also has
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also have
have also had
 the right to get a job at
higher note
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a higher note
 because now-a-days the universities have
graduates
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graduated
 to equal number of males and females, so the management should provide firm to place the women in equal rate.
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, these days the executive is recruiting both ladies and gents in same number, and gals have graduated in large number in the colleges, the regime should provide equal chances
to
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for
 them.
On the other hand
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, the other group was criticizing the women, as they are not getting work in the highly qualified sector. They are
also
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 comparing them with their strength, stamina, etc.. In their point of view, the females had become homemakers and children's caretaker. In the most of the world girls are not allowed to do work,
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this
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 has been habituated from many years.
To
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For
In
 the instance, in 2002 the Toronto University had the graduated both male and female students among them the boys had placed in a highly recruited firm. The public has raised a concern on other gender for their poor performance. In conclusion, the males have been dominating in the business in many situations, but the government should give you equal chance to employ the females. The authority should supply more and equal rights
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 of keeping them down to the ground.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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