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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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manner of acting or controlling yourself
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tudents (what to do and not do) is thought to be respo
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academic path are targets for teachers to achieve with every student, because they do not only teach
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 teachers are leaders, guiders for the best our society. Here is the main factor, I raised my opinion on, 80 % of the information gathering and analysis depend on the student efforts and only 20 % is the contribution of the guider. So we find differences among children in schools and youth in universities in how they react toward the mention data daiy
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manner of acting or controlling yourself
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behaviour
use our students stay more than the half active day in the schools or universities. Others consider concentrating on one aim of learning regardless of other social aims as the
last
 is the task of parents at home to achieve.
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Also, some
le are afraid of different thoughts which their sons or daughters can get during the day of study, especially in multi-cultural country (different religions, traditions, guides and prospective ambitions). In conclusion, it is our role to have integration between study time and home period where our society can get future men and women raised up on values and innovations
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