• These days people are living into their 90’s and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care for the elderly. Do you think it is the responsibility of the family to care for their elderly members or should the government be held responsible?

THERE is an increase in population of old age people due to better health facilities.Now there is a debate who is responsible to take care of
this
part of
population
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the population
a population
that cannot help themselves.
some
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Some
consider that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
of state and some are in the
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a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
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that it is duty of family members to look after them properly.
First
of all everyone
accept
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accepts
the reality of old age and should prepare themselves for
this
part of life.They should save some money so that they don’t need to depend on others for
rest
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the rest
of their life. In some countries like
china Pakistan
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china, Pakistan
family system is very strong
.
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.
children
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Children
and grandchildren take the responsibility of their elder family members.They give them proper
time
and try to fulfil their responsibilities.
Its
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It
is considered as disrespectful to send them
to
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into
retirement
homeThis
has
positive impact
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a positive impact
as well.Children learn moral values and from their life experience they learn various things.
as
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As
we
cant
can not
can't
pay for the hard
time
they faced for
us but
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us, but
we can serve them the way they did for us.
However in
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However, in
some cases families cannot support their elder members.
they
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They
don’t have
time
for them due to high demands of present world.Above all inflation make it difficult for them to serve these people along with
rest
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the rest
of their family members.So government should
also
take the responsibility of these people.As they served their country for so many years and paid taxes as well.
in
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In
some
cases people
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cases, people
at
very old age
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a very old age
start suffering from different psychological issues that
cant
can not
can't
be managed at home.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
they need a nurse
.
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.
government
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Government
should fix some areas in hospitals for them without any charges. At the
end I
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end, I
conclude my essay on
this
point
,
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,
old generation
provide
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provides
services to their country and children for
long
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a long time
time
.
rather
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Rather
them considering them a burden we should respect them
.
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.
government
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The government
Government
should make strict policies for them.

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