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• These days people are living into their 90’s and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care for the elderly. Do you think it is the responsibility of the family to care for their elderly members or should the government be held responsible?

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THERE is an increase in population of old age people due to better health facilities.Now there is a debate who is responsible to take care of
this
 part of
population
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the population
a population
 that cannot help themselves.
some
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Some
 consider that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
 of state and some are in the
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
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 that it is duty of family members to look after them properly.
First
 of all everyone
accept
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accepts
 the reality of old age and should prepare themselves for
this
 part of life.They should save some money so that they don’t need to depend on others for
rest
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the rest
 of their life. In some countries like
china Pakistan
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china, Pakistan
 family system is very strong
.
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.
children
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Children
 and grandchildren take the responsibility of their elder family members.They give them proper
time
 and try to fulfil their responsibilities.
Its
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It
 is considered as disrespectful to send them
to
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into
 retirement
homeThis
 has
positive impact
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a positive impact
 as well.Children learn moral values and from their life experience they learn various things.
as
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As
 we
cant
can not
can't
 pay for the hard
time
 they faced for
us but
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us, but
 we can serve them the way they did for us.
However in
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However, in
 some cases families cannot support their elder members.
they
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They
 don’t have
time
 for them due to high demands of present world.Above all inflation make it difficult for them to serve these people along with
rest
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the rest
 of their family members.So government should
also
 take the responsibility of these people.As they served their country for so many years and paid taxes as well.
in
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In
 some
cases people
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cases, people
 at
very old age
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a very old age
 start suffering from different psychological issues that
cant
can not
can't
 be managed at home.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 they need a nurse
.
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.
government
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Government
 should fix some areas in hospitals for them without any charges. At the
end I
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end, I
 conclude my essay on
this
 point
,
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,
old generation
provide
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provides
 services to their country and children for
long
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a long time
time
.
rather
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Rather
 them considering them a burden we should respect them
.
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.
government
Suggestion
The government
Government
 should make strict policies for them.

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