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Earlier working from home was discouraged. Nowadays, many organizations are encouraging telecommuting. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Support your opinion with examples.

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Although
such
 topics, in all likelihood, never will yield a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on promoting
work-from-home
 options for the employees
instead
 of discouraging personal time can lead to thought-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of numerous arguments that exist on either side, there are advantages and disadvantages to
this
 idea. There are a number of reasons in favour of my stance. To commence with, telecommuting provides more time to spend with family and
hence
 can reduce personal stress. It is important to note that when a person works from his
office
, he has to spend a specified duration within
office
 premises which reduces time with family.
For example
, when I do
work-from-home
, I regularly interact more with my family, which boosted intimacy with them.
Therefore
, the aforementioned discussion shows that
work-from-home
office
 motivates the employee satisfaction. Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that telecommuting can reduce productivity.
Although
,
work-from-home
office
 has to make sure a working internet with the
office
, unless the broadband connection is top-notch, the connectivity may not be good as the person is being inside the
office
.
For instance
, my
office
 requires a VPN that needs to established to access my
office
 files, but my internet frequently disconnects caused delay in work. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed the advantage of being with family while doing the work and the disadvantage that may arise due to inefficient internet connectivity. The equally potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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