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Some people with good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What problems does this cause?

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In today’s globalized world, people with skills and experiences in their own industry, tend to
move
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 a foreign
country
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 to
work
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 in a good environment with better salaries. There lie several reasons behind their migration.
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, these days’, skilled people like to
work
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 abroad either from their own interest or higher lifestyle. Many people dream to travel around the world since their childhood. After finishing their institutional learning, they find some way to
move
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 abroad for a good career. They believe that foreign industry can provide not only a good
job but
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job, but
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 a better life. To illustrate
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, I can present my brother as an example here, who graduated from Bangladesh and later migrated to France for working in a company that provided with better salaries than his own
country
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 job. Most of the people
move
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 to a foreign
land
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 for an improved living condition. They may find their own
land
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 not as comfortable as they are looking for. If they reside in their own
country
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, they may not find those modern facilities that a foreign
country
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 can offer. A study conducted by the Guardian showed that 60% of the highly
ambitious educated
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ambitious, educated
 persons tend to leave their own
country
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 and settle in a developed
country
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 only for a higher lifestyle.
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, in some cases,
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 migration can result in adverse ways to a
country
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. A
country
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 can lose its human resources due to migration. An educated
person
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 is regarded as an asset
for
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in
 his own
country
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. He can play a key role in the development of his own
country
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 by contributing his expertise in his own preferred field. In my opinion, an experienced
person
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 should dream to
work
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 for his own nation rather than transferring his skills abroad. To sum up, an educated
person
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 can definitely serve his
country
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 with his skills. Every
person
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 should contribute something for the betterment of his own
land
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.
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 every
people
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person
have
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has
 a goal to lead a pleasant life, they should not
move
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 abroad to
work
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 and, they should do something
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on
 their own
land
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 using their experiences at the same time.
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