Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ITS IS GOOD FOR CHILDREN TO GROW IN RURAL AREA ON OTHER SIDE SOME CONSIDER URBAN
LIFE
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IS BETTER FOR PROPER DEVELOPMENT OF CHILDRENS
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THERE ARE MORE ADVANTAGES OF RURAL
LIFE
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FOR GOOD BROUGHT UP OF CHILDRENS.I WILL EXPLAIN BOTH ASPECTS IN MY ESSAY.
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I WILL EXPLAIN WHY ADVANTAGES OF CITY
LIFE
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ARE MORE. CITIES ARE
GOOD PLACE
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A GOOD PLACE
TO LIVE IN TERMS OF HEALTH
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EDUCATION AND OTHER RECREATIONAL ACTIVITIES.
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IS VERY
ADVANCE
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AND FULL OF OPPORTUNITIES FOR CHILDRENS.EDUCATION SYSTEM IN SCHOOLS IS VERY
ADVANCE
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AND BASED ON PRACTICAL APPROACH LIKE WELL EQUIPPED LABS AND LIBRARIES.OTHER THAN STUDIES THEY
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INVOLVE IN EXTRA CARICULLAR ACTIVITIES LIKE SWIMMING
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BOXING
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PAINTING
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CILDRENS Have MORE CHANCE TO PARTICIPATE IN VARIOUS COMPTETIONS.IN CITIES SCHOOLS HAVE MENTORS TO GUIDE CHILDREN FOR THEIR FUTURE.
HOWEVER
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PEOPLE IN CITIES FACE ONE MAJOR PROBLEM AND
THAT IS
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POLLUTION.IN
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INDUSTRAIL CHILDREN OFTENLY FACE ISSUES RELATED TO BREATHING AND VARIOUS ALLERGIES.CILDREN ARE MORE ENGAGE ON MOBILES AND SPEND LESS QUALITY TIME WITH FAIMLY. ON OTHER HAND URBAN
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IS
PEACFUL
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A PEACFUL
WITH LESS POLLUTION.CHILDREN BECOME MORE CLOSE TO
NATURE BUT
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NATURE, BUT
STILL THEY FACE PROBLEM OF POOR EDUCATIONAL SYSTEM.EVEN HEALTH FACILITIES ARE NOT AVIABLE
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ONE 3 CHILDREN DIED DUE TO WRONG DOSE OF INJECTION BY UN EXPERIENCED DOCTOR
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OTHER THAN
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URBAN AREAS HAVE LESS OPPORTUNITIES FOR
BETTER FUTURE
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A BETTER FUTURE
. IN THE END I CONCLUDE MY ESSAY ON THE POINT CITIES ARE MORE DEVELOPED AND
ADVANCE
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AND INSPIRE CHILDRENS IN MANY WAYS.THERE IS MORE COMPTETION IN CITIES FOR SURVIVAL AND EVERYONE GIVE THEIR BEST TO ENTER IN THAT RACE.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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