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Some people say that holding sport competitions can cause problems for the host country. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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A contest held to determine the best athletes and teams and to promote sports culture is known as sports
competition
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. It is true that sports play an important role in grooming the physical capacities of young people. In my opinion, every
country
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 has to
made
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make
 necessary arrangements and allocate sufficient funds before hosting any sports
competition
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. (56) We had seen in the past that sports competitions were arranged only in
few countries
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a few countries
 with
limited number
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a limited number
 of participants. Many countries had limited resources and lack of sports player.
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, hosting a sports event was a big challenge for many countries in the past. (45) Presently, the trend of hosting sports is spreading all over the world. Nowadays, every
country
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 wants to
host
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 sports competitions in order to provide better sports opportunities to its players.
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, it is necessary for every
country
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 to plan the whole event keeping in view its financial constraints and the availability of grounds. By taking necessary measures like adequate funds, proper sports grounds and security arrangements for foreign players, it is possible for every
country
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 to arrange a successful sports
competition
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.
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, those countries which have limited resources, lack of sports grounds and security risks are often
failed
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failing
 to
host
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 a successful sports event. (107) The recent establishment of international sports organizations like
International Cricket Council
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the International Cricket Council
 has enabled the countries to
host
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 different sports
competition
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.
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, if the countries keep on working in collaboration,
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 it will be possible for every
country
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 to
host
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 a sports
competition
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 in the near future. (46)
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, in my opinion, it is possible to arrange a sports
competition
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 in any
country
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 if is well planned before its inauguration. (22)
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