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Things like puzzles, board games and pictures can contribute to a child’s development. What would you give a child to help him/her develop and why? Give details and examples in your explanation.

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There are many
games
Suggestion
game
 items available presently in the market to draw attention of children. In order to develop child brain, we must provide them something which could attract them and make curiosity in their mind. I strongly believe that game products are one of the unique material, can contribute child’s development. Kids are always prawn to
such
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 games which are engaging and keeping them awake with interest. Puzzles and board games help them to think in order to use their brain. I would prefer to provide them with various lighting effects with other plays. Games which are required physical activities, can help them to get a sound growth with their ages. My son is 5 years old, he is very fond of video games and TV shows which has action and funny acts. There are many cartoon networks
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 the TV channels which can be used as learning tools to expedite thinking process of children. Ultimately the fun
can be transform
Suggestion
can transform
 into a teaching technique which are being accepted by children enthusiastically. Young stars are
active follower
Suggestion
an active follower
active followers
 of any accomplishments as visualization is easier
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 hands on activities.
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