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Some people feel that entertainers (eg. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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Entertainment has become
a
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an
 important part of everyone’s daily expenses, like
movie ticket
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movie tickets
a movie ticket
, football match or even rock concert.
As a result
, as entertainers
,
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,
their income has grown to a record mark without a sign to stop. Some people start questioning the money they earned: do super stars deserve that much income? Personally, I think they do.
Although
 compared to other professionals, entertainers are not making
direct contribution
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a direct contribution
direct contributions
 to the society like fire fighters, doctors or teachers, but they do influence people in other dimensions, which have been shaping the society in a better way. Celebrities like film stars or pop musicians can push the
culture
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cultural
 interaction between different countries and societies, which is unachievable without them.
For instance
, because of the movie stars from the US, Asian people get the chance to know western culture, like how do people celebrate Christmas, what does Halloween means and so on. We
can not
can not
cannot
 deny these positive impacts they have been made,
hence
 we need to accept that they are highly paid. Apart from entertainers like film stars or sport stars, I believe people who work in the science field
also
 deserve to get high income.
For instance
, it takes decades for a scientist to invent a new medicine for cancer, during the long process, he or
her
female pronoun; a female, or something regarded as female, e.g. a ship
she
 needs to give up so much personally life and force on the endless experiments and testings. And the outcome they make could save millions of
life
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lives
. Overall, I do not agree that entertainers are over paid. Meanwhile, I believe there are other professionals in
this
 society need more attention and need be highly paid for the contribution they have made as well.

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