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. Now a days people make new friends through social networks and Internet chat groups some people think this is good other think that face to face interaction is essential discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #friends #networks #internet #chat #groups #face #interaction
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The way of communication with each other. With
advancement
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the advancement
 of Technology
such
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 as mobile, smartphone and internet people spend more time on social media.
In
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contrast some
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contrast, some
 individuals believe that making a
friends
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friend
 after a personal interaction.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 will leave that to be familiar with someone online is more convenient rather than contract
face
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two
in the direction of
to
face
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.
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.
 From my point of view coma social sites are beneficial for many persons to make new friends not only in their country even in
foreign country
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foreign countries
a foreign country
. Some help to chatting with others as a less video chatting comma messaging dot a good example is, these sides provide chat rooms as well as video call or voice call on WhatsApp to avoid
face
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 to
face
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 conversation. Anyone can use messenger or chat room for new friends gossip. It can
also
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 be argued by some people, because their belief is
hold
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held
 on online talk
first
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 lose out the text for making friends and head to head debate.
For instance
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 a person has
big list
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a big list
 of friends on Facebook
ok but
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ok, but
 in real life he she does not have much friends full stop
this
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 is
happen
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happening
 because he spends too much of his her time on the social media and don't give time to mix with others to friendship
.
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.
 Generally, there is conflict in both arguments one
hand some
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hand, some
 have
positive attitude
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a positive attitude
positive attitudes
 about advancement of social life and communicate by internet. But
other side
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the other side
 as a negative views for social media
conversation but
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conversation, but
 in my opinion use of
new way
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new ways
a new way
the new way
 of gossip and to friendship is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 good for knowing to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 culture and make friends all over the world.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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