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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It
i
r
irrefutable that
both
 parents play a crucial
role
 in the
development
 of their
offsprings
. While many people
advocate
 that it is the sole
responsibility
 of a female
partner
 to grow up the children, I strongly believe that the
contribution
 of a
father
 in developing a
child
 is as important as a
mother
. It
i
r
irrefutable that
both
 parents play a crucial
role
 in the
development
 of their
offsprings
. While many people
advocate
 that it is the sole
responsibility
 of a female
partner
 to grow up the children, I strongly believe that the
contribution
 of a
father
 in developing a
child
 is as important as a
mother
. It
i
r
irrefutable that
both
 parents play a crucial
role
 in the
development
 of their
offsprings
. While many people
advocate
 that it is the sole
responsibility
 of a female
partner
 to grow up the children, I strongly believe that the
contribution
 of a
father
 in developing a
child
 is as important as a
mother
. It
i
r
irrefutable that
both
 parents play a crucial
role
 in the
development
 of their
offsprings
. While many people
advocate
 that it is the sole
responsibility
 of a female
partner
 to grow up the children, I strongly believe that the
contribution
 of a
father
 in developing a
child
 is as important as a
mother
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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