Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Due to the course of industrialization and modernization, televisions are becoming widely used by students as a supplement for education. Some people hold the belief that books might be replaced by televisions someday as it is considered

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very effective

study

tool. I completely disagree with

this

point of view. It is apparent that books cannot be replaced by television as a learning gadget owing to the fact that children have a tendency to misuse it when their parents are gone.

Thus

, not only are televisions failed to act as a supplement for studying but

also

appears negative consequences. For instant, most programmes shown on TV have the same purpose - to entertain people,

educational value

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the educational value

is not considered the top concern, so that children are more likely to be attracted by other interesting programmes

such

as cartoon or movie, than to give their attention to educational channels on TV.

On the other hand

, since the dawn of civilization, books have been one of the most important

study

equipment for our human kind. Scholars

recorded

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have recorded

their

researchs

systematic investigation to establish facts

research

researches

and knowledges by written in

books

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the books

, so books has long

became

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become

our most valuable treasure of knowledge that cannot be replaced by any chance.

Moreover

, students can concentrate easily on their

pariticular

unique or specific to a person or thing or category

particular

field of

study

and not be distracted by other recreational programmes, which resulted in better education quality and higher

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student

achievement. In conclusion, despite the efficiency and usefulness of television in terms of education, it cannot

replaces

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replace

books as a major learning tool.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Educational tool
Documentaries
Passive consumption
Critical thinking
Imagination
Attention span
Literacy skills
Screen time
Parental guidance
Digital materials
Interactive learning
Multimedia resources
Cognitive development
Reading comprehension
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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular speices if plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

some people believe that toruist do not learn anything during their holidays, while others believe that they learn a lot. discuss both sides.

*Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. To what extent do you agree with this idea? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.