Every year, crime rate is sharply increasing. Although, it is considered by some that the Capital Punishment is the efficient way to decrease the crime rate. While there are others who believe that it can be reduced by taking proper decisions. In my opinion, both are equally important to eradicate unlawful act.

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Every year,
crime rate
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the crime rate
is sharply increasing.
Although
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, it is considered by some that the Capital Punishment is the efficient way to decrease the crime rate. While there are others who believe that it can be reduced by taking proper decisions. In my opinion, both are equally important to eradicate unlawful act. On the one hand, I
personal
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personally
think that for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
illegal acts like rape, murder and drug trafficking, death sentence is the best way to
deterrent
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deter
crimes.
This
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is the only harsh way to punish the criminals.
Moreover
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, life imprisonment is
also
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the best punishment, but many criminals come out on bail or by using political power.
For example
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, as per the latest survey conducted by BBC news, out of 100 criminals, only 80 get convicted by court. In that 80 individuals, 40 get out on bail by showing
political influence
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the political influence
which is a major concern.
Government
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The government
should implement strict law and ensure that no culprit escape from the punishment.
On the other hand
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, death sentence cannot be given to all wrongdoers, but it has to be chosen based on the offence. Some crimes like robbery should be punished by imposing fine and jail term.
For instance
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, One of my friends violated traffic rule by over speeding due to some emergency issue, but he was not jailed because
court
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the court
understood his situation and let him go by imposing fine of 10,000 rupees.
Likewise
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, the judgement has to be implemented based on the act.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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