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Information Technology is changing the many aspects of our lives and now dominates on home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of Information Technology outweigh its disadvantages?

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The
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 used to store, retrieve and transmit data or
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 using computer systems and networks is called
information
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Technology
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. The use of
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technology
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 not only makes our work
easy but
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easy, but
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 saves our time.
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, I strongly agree that its benefits are more significant than its drawbacks. (49) We had seen in the past that
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 handling was a big problem for people. They always move from one place to another just in order to exchange data or
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.
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, there was no concept of transferring data online until the invention of computer and internet in
19th century
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the 19th century
. (50) Presently, the
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technology
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 is revolutionizing the entire world around us. Nowadays, it is not only changing our lives from home to workplace, but
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 providing us better opportunities during leisure time.
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, the pocket size cell phone always keeps you in contact with your family and friends.
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, it is now possible to transfer any kind of
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 or data just by a single click of
mouse
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the mouse
a mouse
 using electronic mail.
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, the use of mobile in excess or watching computer screen for longer time is dangerous to our health,
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, their advantages are far greater than their disadvantages. (100) The recent development in
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technology
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 has transformed the whole world into a global village. We are now able to send or receive
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 even from other planets.
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, if the
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technology
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 keeps on opening new doors for people,
then
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 we shall soon be able to step into a digital world. (52)
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, I believed that
information
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technology
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 is altering every aspect of our life and the benefits of
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 development are undeniable. (21)
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