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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent 1950 Main road Houses school Farmland playground 1980 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground 2010 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent 1950 Main road Houses school Farmland playground 1980 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground 2010 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground
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The maps illustrate
tht
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the
 changes that
was
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 taken
place
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 at West
Park
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 secondary
school
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 from 1950 to 2010.
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,there were many changes
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happend
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happened
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fram
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from
land
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 to
sports
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a sports
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 field from here to
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car
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a car
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park
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.But
main
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the main
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 road and
school
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 stayed unchanged In 1950,there were
houses
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 situated at the side of the
school
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, behind the
houses
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 there was
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farm
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farmland
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land
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,side of the
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farm
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farmland
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land
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play ground
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playground
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 was situated.
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,in 1980,
houses
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 were replaced by
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car
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the car
a car
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park
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parks
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 and science
block
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blocks
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.
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farm
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farmland
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land
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replaced
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was replaced
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 by
sports
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the sports
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field
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fields
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.But,
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school
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the school
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 and
play ground
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playground
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remaind
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remained
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 in
same
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the same
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place
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.in 2010
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car
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the car
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park
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 was extended and
play ground
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playground
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place
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 made smaller to relocate the sports field
next
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 to
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car
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the car
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Park
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 .
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,from 1950 to 2010 ,
main
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the main
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 road and
school
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was stayed
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 in
same
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place
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.
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 up,the maps depict that over 60 years there were many changes
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taking
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place
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 at West
Park
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 secondary
school
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.
Houses
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 and
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farm
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farmland
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land
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demolished
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were demolished
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 and
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car
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a car
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park
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parks
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 took over that
place
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.But
main
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the main
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 road and
school
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were
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apply
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remain in
same
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the same
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place
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, park, school, land, car, houses, farm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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