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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

#crime #rate #offenders #parents #skills
In the modern society, a lot of parents do not know how to teach their own kids
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It causes the increase juvenile crimes.I totally agree with
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 point of view. In
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I will discuss reasons why I agree that parents need to learn the parenting skills.
Firstly
, the modern life is busier than the past. In the past, we believed that father should bring the bacon back and mother should stay at home to educate their children.
Therefore
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the children can receive the good family education.
However
, there are a lot of kids who live in double career family nowadays.They do not get the attention anymore
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there are only toy
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 TV and babysitter for their childhood.
For example
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there is report show that the infant who did not have good care with their parents during growth time
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it will cause the children become bad.
Secondly
, parents’
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be hair
 will influence children.Especially
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during
children
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children's
child
 growth up.They will imitate their parents act.If there parents are alcoholic
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,
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drug addict or violent.There
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is
 really big chance children will become as same as their parents.For instant, Andrei Chikatilo is the
baddest
(superlative of 'bad') most wanting in quality or value or condition
worst
baldest
 man in the world. He killed the 53 girls in 1990.When he was young
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His mother will beat him seriously when he
peeing
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is peeing
pees
 in the bed.The small broken heart causes the terrible event. In the conclusion, parents need to go to school to learn parenting skill.It can save some innocent life and decrease
crime rate
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crime rates
the crime rate
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