Some people say that computer games are bad for children by all means; others believe that these games are contributing to children’s development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
contemporary era, children are more involving in technology than
anyother
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any other
things. They prefer playing
computer
games rather than various outdoor games which is thought to be unwise by few individuals. Whereas, several
mass
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masses
of people believes that
computer
games are beneficial for youngster's mind growth. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position.
First
of all, There is no doubt that electronic games are highly addictive that children can't stop themselves from playing it. Because of
this
their mind is always
pause
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a pause
by thinking games all the time, that they unable to concentrate on
ther
of them or themselves
their
the
other
study
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studies
or other curriculum activities. To exemplify, research shows that more than 70 percent of school children are having low marks and physical problems like eye rashes, back pain have been found playing
computer
games.
Therefore
,
computer
games are one of the obstacles
to
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in
the future of
youngsters
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the youngsters
. Turning to the other sides of
argument
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the argument
an argument
, It says that, some critics consider that
computer
games are
entierly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
entirely
beneficial for children's evolution.
Although
it's not required whole body movement,
however
computer
games need strategy to win which develops their intelligence. As time is changed, it's
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
a great platform to pursue their carrier where they are interested in it.
For instance
, big names as a gamer like Shroud and Ninja earns more than $100,000 in a month.
Thus
,
computer
games became eminent day by day that children can enjoy themselves and
moreover
, it
also regard
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also regards
as
aproficiency
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a proficiency
. In conclusion, I strongly opine that playing a
computer
games
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game
for children is not substandard but there should be a limit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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