During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job Begin as follows: Dear ... ,

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Dear Tom, My name is Edmond Stafford, we met on a flight from Osaka to Hong Kong of Peach Airlines on 1st of July, we arrived at Hong Kong at 3pm and we sat

to each other, we talked during the flight and we exchanged our name cards. I believe you remember who I am. Today I am writing to express my interest in the position in the chain of your restaurants. You have mentioned

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your chain of restaurants and you would like to expand it and use more information technology for you to manage them easily, especially the inventory and point of sales. As I told you during the flight, I am an IT expert, so I am particularly interested in the IT system development job which can help you in these two areas. I am a suitable person for you because I have 10 years of system development experience, specialising in point of sales systems for supermarkets and

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stores. I believe my skills and experience can help you to set up and customise a robust point of sales system for your chain of restaurants. We can discuss

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face-to-face, and I am available anytime

week, you can call me by the contact information to decide a date. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you very much. Yours sincerely, Edmond.

Thu Jan 16 2020

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7 paragraphs

229 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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