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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram is highlighting the ratio of men and women that were enrolled in different courses in the united kingdom in 2011. as a general trend the
number
 of female students
exceeding
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 the
number
 of
male
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the male
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student
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students
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within
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 5
subject
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subjects
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 out of six. As for
the
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art and design, the
number
 of boys
were
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 higher than the
number
 of girls by 25
as
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a
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difference.
Nevertheless
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 the girls dominated the remaining subjects by reasonably little variation compared to boys except in the instances of philosophy where the difference went up reaching 100. On other hand, it seems that students in 2011
was
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 targeting specific curricula more than
the
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others. Studying language and literature was the most demanding
courses
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course
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 where the
number
 of
student
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students
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 enrolled reached around 480 boys and girls
all together
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altogether
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.
In
contrast
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 philosophy and history & archaeology ranked
the
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as the
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 lowest demanding courses attended with a total admission reached 200
student
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students
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 for each.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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