People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individually and on society.

Experts throughout both the developed and developing nations are debating about insomnia being spread among individuals like forest
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these days. In
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aspect of life for an individual in
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world.
People
are now spending less
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personal development and care than before. The main reason behind
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, the stress from
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for promotions,
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competitions
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have increased so much that in a normal office, employees have to work longer hours to hold their current positions and get promotion and raise. A recent article from The Times Newspaper mentioned that the levels of insomnia have risen tremendously among IT workers in
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few years because of
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development methodology.
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, not only workers but students, especially university ones are
also
facing sleeplessness more often these days. Because of
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and high number of
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in the curriculum students are spending more
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studying and preparing for exams
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reducing their
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time
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Oxford University
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that students enrolled in Bachelor’s program are studying 18 hours a day to cope with their curriculum and
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only 4 hours for taking rest. Less sleep not only affects
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health but society as well. Because of insufficient amount of sleep
people
have gained
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to get angry more often.
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these days’
people
are seeking more medical attention than before. A recent survey from
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of Canada shows that citizens are visiting doctors frequently for mental health conditions like short temper and it was found that the main reason behind
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was less sleep. To summarise all the arguments I can conclude that
people
should now spend more
time
in bed resting and relaxing before prioritizing other things benefiting not only themselves but society.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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