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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#year #languages #people #life #world
Recently,
variety
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a variety
 of
language
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languages
 has been diminished, why, some of them have
die
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died
 out.
Although
 some people believe that life will be more comfortable without different
language
, I reckon, we should make
plane
extensive tract of level open land
plain
 to preserve them as well as possible. Some people say, it is not important to make
effort
Suggestion
an effort
the effort
efforts
 to save different
language
, why the think with decreasing the linguistic diversity, communication among people will be improved, in other word if unpopular
language
 die
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
, people will have to learn the same
language
 and conversation will be organized better.
In
addition
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addition, this
this
 approach
think
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thinks
, by fewer languages, the related-expenditure of will
also
 be less. In fact, not only is it not necessary to pay money for protecting languages again extinction, but
also
, the cost of education will
also
 be reduced dramatically.
On the other hand
, I think different languages are the root of diverse cultures which have existed until now. In other word with ding out a
language
, a culture is ruined inevitably. And
also
, it is clear that, beauty of
world
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the world
depend
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depends
 on various cultures and its specific features. Take as an illustration different
civilizations
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civilization
 along the history have been formed by distinct cultures,
in addition
 without understanding the cultures, perception of civilizations is not possible, and
furthermore
,
language
 is the main way of realizing the cultures.
Moreover
, I suppose, like a tree that never grow without its roots, a hardly could a society
also
 progress without its languages and roots. In conclusion, I could infer,
however falling
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however, falling
 in diversity of
language
 may reduce the cost totally, they act as a
roots
Suggestion
root
 of a society and without them a community will never be able to promote.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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