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The diagram below shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The image describes the working of the
water
 pump powered by the
energy
 obtained from the
sun
.
Process
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The process
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 of extracting
water
 from the underground
bore
 or well starts by collecting solar
energy
 from the
sun
. The massive heat or
energy
 generated from the
sun
 gets stored using
solar
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a solar
the solar
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panel
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panels
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. It consists of photovoltaic cells which
consumes
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consume
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the
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apply
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solar
energy
 and
converts
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convert
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 it into direct current. The
pole withstanding
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pole-withstanding
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 solar
panel
 is dug below the ground level and the
panel
facing
Wrong verb form
faces
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 the
sun
. The DC power generated from the
panel
 is linked to the
bore
 pump located inside the underground
bore
 or well.
Water
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The water
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 level in the well is higher than the
bore
 pump. The current attached
with
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to
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 the
bore
 pump allows
water
 to pump out and stored
it
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apply
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into
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in
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 the
water
 tank through a pipe.
This
water
 tank delivers
water
 to the whole village.
Overall
, it can be seen that the whole process of working of
water
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the water
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 pump with the help of solar
energy
 takes mainly three steps, first one is to generate DC power through
solar
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a solar
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panel
then
, pumping out the
water
 from the
bore
 or well
storing
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and storing
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 it into the
water
 tank and
then
 supplying the
water
 to the whole village.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, energy, sun, panel, bore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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