People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individually and on society.

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Experts throughout both the developed and developing nations are debating about insomnia being spread among individuals like forest fire these days. In
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essay I will discuss examples from The Times Newspaper and Oxford University to provide illustrations and prove points.
Time
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is the most import aspect of life for an individual in
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fast paced world. People are now spending less
time
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for personal development and care than before. The main reason behind
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is twofold,
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, the stress
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workplace for promotions, competitions have increased so much that in a normal office, employees have to work longer hours to hold their current positions and get
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a promotion
the promotion
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a raise
. A recent article from The Times Newspaper mentioned that the levels of insomnia have risen tremendously among IT workers in
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the past few years
because of “Agile” development methodology.
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, not only
workers but
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workers, but
students, especially university ones are
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facing sleeplessness more often these days. Because of
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toughness
and high number of syllabus in the
curriculum students
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curriculum, students
are spending more
time
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in studying and preparing for exams and reducing their bed
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. Research faculties in the Oxford University shows that students enrolled in Bachelor’s program are studying 18 hours a day to cope with their curriculum and spending only 4 hours for taking rest. Less sleep not only affects
individuals
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individual
individuals'
individual's
health but
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health, but
society as well. Because of insufficient amount of sleep people have gained tendency to get angry more often.
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Also, these
days’ people are seeking more medical attention than before. A recent survey from Government of Canada shows that citizens are visiting doctors frequently for mental health conditions like short temper and it was found that the main reason behind
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was less sleep. To summarise all the arguments I can conclude that people should now spend more
time
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in bed resting and relaxing before prioritizing other things benefiting not only themselves but society.

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