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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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Travel around the world is
one
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 of the priorities for young people nowadays.
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 practice allowed the discovery of new picturesque places and bring some advantages to the local economies.
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, in an e
nourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
number of locations the disadvantages related to the culture and nature are superior. In
one
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 hand, the foreing
tourism
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 is considered
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 of the economic bases in countries like Costa Rica, Colombia, Brazil or Thailand, because the payments that the international visitors made in dollars, pounds or euros; and,
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ctivities
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activity
promote an economical growth.
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, in Colombia
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 dollar represent 3 200 Colombian pesos
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 a huge difference in a
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terms.
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, the introduction of new people in sensitive areas provokes critical situations.
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, in the environment is very common to lost native specimens of animals and plants because of the new structures that are built for the tourist.
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, the production of wastes and water pollution are e
xtremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
high in comparison with the local
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. Another weakness that affects the inhabitants is the expansion of d
angerous types
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the dangerous types
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,
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 as sexual
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.
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, the native culture is transformed i
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into
a product that brings m
oney but,
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money, but
 in c
onsequense
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
they l
osse
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
loose
loses
the local m
aners.
laborer who works in a mine
miners
 In conclusion, I think that even when the international tourist expand the finances of the country, it is more important to preserve the environment and culture. If the governments agree to create a
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 serious policy, it could be possible to reach an equal agreement between the economics and the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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