The best way to reduce traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for younger drivers and to lower the age limit for elderly ones. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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There is no doubt these days
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accidents
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are playing a major role in our lives.
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the best solution to decrease the number of
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traffic
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? Is considered one of the most controversial questions today. In
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I am going to examine the advantages and disadvantages of
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there are people who argue that the disadvantages considerably outweigh the benefits. The main reason
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believing that the oldest parents
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separated from their children for any reason, they do not have anybody to help them
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their stuff and they can not afford the transportation price. My mother,
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is 55 years old and she is staying alone, if the government applied
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limited age group, she
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drive
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any more and she
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to pay
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Uber which is difficult since her economic status not
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of
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young adults
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significantly increasing day after day. A good illustration of that nowadays the school is ordering a lot of stuff for the students and if
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they
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can just
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their neighbourhood to buy them, that will help their parents a lot.
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case. The people argued that most
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young adults are excited and
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do not think
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their safety, which will lead to
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number of
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accidents
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, if the teenager
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without
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their family, they might
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in
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high.
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, once we get older, our vision acuity will drop
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by years which lead to car
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young adults ages between 17 to 20 and
those
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older people over 60 are not qualified enough to
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car. We have seen there are no easy answers
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this
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe the age limitation rule will play a significant role in reducing the number of car
accidents
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and
make
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making
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the world safer in the future.
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