The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the data on the operational
year
,
length
of
network
in miles and
number
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a number
the number
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of commuters
traveling
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travelling
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annually in millions by the underground
railway
in six cities across the world, namely
London
, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC,
Kyoto
and Los Angeles.
Overall
, the
London
underground
rail
network
is the oldest and the longest one,
while
Kyoto
's
network
is the latest and shortest
amongst
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among
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all. Meanwhile, Tokyo's
railway
network
is the busiest among them.
To begin
with, the
London
underground
railway
network
is the oldest one established in the eighteenth century, in the
year
1863. The rest of the
railway
networks became operational in the
nineteenth-century
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nineteenth century
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with Los Angeles's latest addition in the
year
2001. In terms of the
length
of the
network
,
London
has the largest route covering 394
km
of distance in total, which is almost twice the
length
of the
second
-largest
rail
system, which is in Paris. The
length
of the route in Tokyo and Washington DC stands at 155 and 126
km
. Los Angels have 28
km
of
the
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apply
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rail
network
,
while
Kyoto
is at the bottom of the list at 11km. Among the number of commuters
traveling
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travelling
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annually by the underground
rail
network
, Japan has
busiest
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the busiest
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with 1927 million using
this
transport system, followed by Paris,
London
,
Washington
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and Washington
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DC. Meanwhile,
Kyoto
has
least
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the least
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number of commuters taking
this
route per
year
at 45 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, length, network, railway, london, kyoto, rail, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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