Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, many people believe that social media has many advantages, but some people say that social media has a
lot
of disadvantages, and that help criminal to do bad things. I agree that social media has advantages and disadvantages to the users.
However
, in my opinion, the benefits that social media brings about are
trendmendous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
tremendous
and exceed its negative effects.
Firstly
, social media can help people connect to the whole world, people can chat, and even meet a person through chat video on social media.
Moreover
, on some well-known social media like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram,..., there are some education channel and that page share a
lot
of useful thing that help pupil to increase their knowledge. Just sitting at home, people can connect and explore the world through their foreign friends and some pages.
Thirdly
, through video chat, a student can
learning
Suggestion
learn
online, ask what they don’t know with their teacher and maybe exchange
information
about learning with their friends from different schools in the world. Fourthly, people can advertise about their company so that a
lot
of people would know, and that
help
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helps
the manager to get more money.
Although
social media has a
lot
of advantages, it
also
has some disadvantages.
Firstly
, some people, especially children at a very young age, don’t know what to do with social media, so they connect with bad people and those bad people lead children to bad things. There are people who might not have the intention to harm us,
however
, introduce games and other toxic materials, like pornography, trends, memes, etc.
that
Suggestion
That
make
Suggestion
makes
us addicted or mentally harmed.
Secondly
, uploading our own
information
on social media is not safe, some people call ‘hacker’ can see our
information
and do bad things.
For example
, they can use our
information
to make a new nick on our
information
and they can even steal money from the bank thanks to that
information
. To conclude, social media has a
lot
of advantages, but
also has
Suggestion
also have
some disadvantages. But those disadvantages are really rare, so I believe that we can overcome that and make the social media, a great and safe place to entertain and study.
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