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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

#women #men
Yes, I agree that females are good
in
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at
 nurturing children. In
this
 essay you will see that how mothers are much convenient in rearing young once.
Firstly
, as ladies carry a baby in their
womb they
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womb, they
 have a very emotional relationship with the infants. They can understand them and their needs when the babies cannot even utter a word.
As
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At
 most of the time a lady will always spend time with their children by taking care of them, being after them for
whole day
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a whole day
the whole day
, understanding them when they cry. They spend their entire life for their children and try to fulfil their needs in all the possible ways.
Secondly
, girls are more patient and
this
 nature is must to have while handle the kids. Even when
a
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an
 offspring grows and goes to
school mother
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school, mother
 takes care of his/her studies, projects, assignments, programs and sports. A female parent will be always present in each and every
activities
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activity
. She will meet the teachers and understand his/her performance to improve more, will know the
friends
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friends'
 circle and will be his/her
first
 friend, mentor and social guide to deal with real life problems and enjoy the happiness in the world. In Short, ladies can play various
role
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roles
 and are majorly acceptable in developing the adolescents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • social constructs
  • nurturing
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • paternity leave
  • co-parenting
  • development
  • economic pressures
  • primary caregiver
  • gender biases
  • fluidity of roles
  • societal norms
  • inherent differences
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