It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

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Yes, I agree that females are good

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nurturing children. In

this

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essay you will see that how mothers are much convenient in rearing young once.

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, as ladies carry a baby in their

womb they

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womb, they

have a very emotional relationship with the infants. They can understand them and their needs when the babies cannot even utter a word.

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most of the time a lady will always spend time with their children by taking care of them, being after them for

whole day

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a whole day

the whole day

, understanding them when they cry. They spend their entire life for their children and try to fulfil their needs in all the possible ways.

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, girls are more patient and

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nature is must to have while handle the kids. Even when

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offspring grows and goes to

school mother

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school, mother

takes care of his/her studies, projects, assignments, programs and sports. A female parent will be always present in each and every

activities

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activity

. She will meet the teachers and understand his/her performance to improve more, will know the

friends

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friends'

circle and will be his/her

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friend, mentor and social guide to deal with real life problems and enjoy the happiness in the world. In Short, ladies can play various

role

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roles

and are majorly acceptable in developing the adolescents.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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211 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

child-rearing
caregiver
social constructs
nurturing
gender roles
stereotypes
paternity leave
co-parenting
development
economic pressures
primary caregiver
gender biases
fluidity of roles
societal norms
inherent differences

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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

Fully explain your ideas

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasizes that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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