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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. To what extent do you agree?

#university #guarantees #people #job
This
 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement because post secondary
education
 is the most important thing in the life of adults, it is a liky t
icke
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lucky
likely
t to indepe
ndity, a ro
free from external control and constraint
independent
ute for good j
ob, mone
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a good job
good jobs
y and network. The primary reason why it is excell
ent idea to go
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an excellent idea
 to
university
 you can get the job of your dream and the salary that you want. There are lots of vacancies where the main demand is bachelor degree and higher, so the salary they are offer
much
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offering
bigger than the same position whitho
ut
in absence of
without
such
 demand. According to the research of Oxford
university
, people who have
university
 degree can find a new job more f
aste and
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faster
more faster
more fat
get more money than people with school
education
. The
second
 main reason is the qualification and knowledge that you can get at the
university
. During the study you collide with range
of di
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a range
fferent tasks, you study not only to learn math or litera
ture but
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literature, but
also
 to work hard under the pressure, manage with your time and deal with conflicting people in different projects, you learnt to be a leader or to work in a team.
For example
, people with hight
educa
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
tion can solve proble
m and f
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problems
the problem
a problem
ind non-standa
rt decis
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
ion more often than their peers without
univer
sity degree. To
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a university degree
university degrees
conclude the hi
gh
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higher
the higher
education
 is the
first
 step in you ca
ree
of you or yourself
your
r, the foundation of you we
alt
of you or yourself
your
hy life in the future. All knowledge that you can get from the
university
 will help you during the hole l
ife
all of something including all its component elements or parts
whole
and will become a confident person
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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