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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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With the proliferation of social media websites and mobile applications, the uses use of the internet among youngsters redundant to socialise with friends is gradually increasing which has numerous detrimental impacts on them. I believe that to cope with
this
 situation the
government
 should take several measures and a parent should devote
attention
 to their children. Not only should the
government
 make people aware about the disastrous consequences of the extreme uses of social media in daily routine but
also
 ratify some policies to control its daily accessibility.
For instance
, an immensely popular mobile video game PUBG has recently restricted increased online playing
time
 to 4 hours, which reduced the average screen
time
 of youngsters to a large extent.
Thus
, if people will have limited
time
 to use social media
such
 as Facebook, Instagram in a day than it would will compel them to assign more
attention
 to important tasks.
Moreover
, different campaigns should be run by the
government
 to make people aware about the negatives of extreme uses of social media that force people to think twice before its use.
Furthermore
, parents should devote decent
attention
 to their children internet’s browsing
time
. A recent report by the BBC has revealed that about forty percent of young children who have no parent’s parental supervision spend most of their leisure
time
 on surfing the social media portals.
This
 not only effect affects their academic performances, but
also
 causes of several health diseases
such
 as weak eyesight. A little
attention
 from a parent on children’s internet accessibility could save them from all of these detrimental effects which again lead to a better formation of their future. In conclusion, in order to mitigate social media addiction among youngsters both the
government
 and parents should come forward,
otherwise
, the society will pay a heavy economic and social price.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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