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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, it is really common to change
company
 during the working life. The
work
 market is changing and it is becoming more dynamic. Many workers, specifically
workers which
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workers, which
 are facing the
first
 experience in the working field, are asking themselves whether is better to remain in the same
company
 for their entire working life or not.
Firstly
, it is important to observe that it is difficult for workers to know which type of job is more aligned with their
knowledge
, capacity and attitude. The fist job can help workers to understand whether their choice is right.
Moreover
, when the
company
hire
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hires
 someone try always to provide a formation which can help workers to increase their
knowledge
 and ability. I observed the example of my
cousin which
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cousin, which
 changed in 3 years 5 companies around the world and he can now
work
 with people with different countries without any problem and he is able to
work
 in a lot of different fields.
On the other hand
, some people believe that when you
work
 in a
company
 for a long time, you can understand better the culture of it and thanks to your loyalty it is easy to achieve more responsibility job.
Moreover
, some people believe that, whether you decide to
work
 in the same
company
 for
you
of you or yourself
your
 entire working life, you can achieve a
knowledge
 regarding your particular role which is unique and
thus
, it is difficult to replace you because you become necessary to the
company
. In conclusion, I think whether before it was important to remain in the same
company
 in order to achieve an important role, nowadays it is
more easy
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easier
 to acquire more useful
knowledge
 through different types of experiences.
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