As computers are being used more and move in education. There will soon be no role for the teacher in classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that computers have become one of the most important tools utilized by teachers and students in education. Personally, I still cannot agree the idea that computers could replace teachers completely in

short period

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a short period

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they are significantly useful. There are several merits of using computers in education.

Firstly

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, thank for the using of

computer

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study become

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study, become

more efficiency

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more efficient

and connivance. Comparing with traditional learning materials, application software installed

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the computers,

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as Word and Excel,

have dramatically shorten

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have dramatically shortened

the time on writing an essay or analyse a statistic report. Editing these papers now is so easy that the tasks could be done by clicking a mouth to change pictures or retyping some texts. Meanwhile, students now are free from the

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the state of being under the control of a force or influence or abstract power

bondage

of geography. They can acquire the knowledge they need from the teacher over

thousands kilometres

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a thousand kilometres

thousand kilometres

away and enjoy the class by just

seat

be seated

sit

in front of the

computer

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screen.

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study

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the study

studies

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computers is more environmental friendly e-books stored in

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have been adapt

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have been adapted

and adopt to replace paper-based reading materials.

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, self-learning is becoming much easier because the mass amount of e-learning material could be accessed by students themselves by computers.

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although

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computers make some great contributions

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education, it does not mean that teachers can be replaced by computers. Teachers still have some non-replaceable benefits to students.

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of all, teachers can not only impart knowledge but

also

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take care of

students

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students'

student

psychology

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psychological

health as well.

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, teachers

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can point out the drawbacks of students and customize the study plan depend on the

students

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students'

personalities and intelligence.

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but no least,

teachers professional

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teachers, professional

behaviours would be a good example for students to follow and imitate to help them to build up positive personalities and the value of ethic. In conclusion, despite the advantages of computers, it seems to me that it is impossible for

computer

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to achieve the task of replacing teachers in the classroom in

the shorter

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the shortest

. It still is a good assistant for teachers.

Mon Jan 20 2020

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As computers are being used more and move in education. There will soon be no role for the teacher in classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

the pie charty below show the average of household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • explain why you will be visiting the town • give details of where you will be staying • ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment

Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

What are the prons and cons of going to live or study abroad?