In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income & therefore don't require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

#countries #women #people #income #security #marriage

Marriage is an unforgettable and important event in human being's

life

. Women are

also

receiving an education and earning

decent salary

Suggestion

a decent salary

. The purpose behind marriage should never be related

to achieve

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to achieving

the economic security. I strongly disagree with the premise of the question that women shouldn'

experience the requirement to get married only due to materialistic factor. Marriage us an exquisite emotional and social bonding between two families. It constitutes several new relationships. If anyone is getting married by keeping merely materialistic things in

mind

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mind, then

then

he/she is committing the blunder. I am not undermining the significance of money in human being's

life

. I totally admit that money is an indispensable thing for the humans. But

then

, there are several other things

also

exist which are necessary. Being a gold digger isn'

an indication of

mature and prudent

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the mature and prudent woman

woman

. Prolonged loneliness can be extremely detrimental for human's mental

leath

Suggestion

Leath

laugh

. Money isn'

the solution of all problems. Money alone can'

bring happiness always. Marriage is beautiful institution that can bring caring, understanding, polite, kind and genuine soul mate in

woman

life

. The presence of other gender can provide valuable emotional support.

Real man

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Real men

A real man

will treat the

woman

with utmost care and dignity. He will act as

motivation booster

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a motivation booster

when his significant other is feeling pessimistic. They both can fight with each other, irritate each other, bring smile on

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

person's face. It is an indeed amazing feeling to pamper and cuddle each other and spend quality time. It can bring immense happiness.

Finally

refers to the speaker or writer

would say that the decision to not get married due to financial independence is absolutely preposterous and it causes great emotional turmoil in

woman's

Suggestion

a woman's life

life

. Money is undoubtedly important

thing but

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thing, but

emotions must never be overlooked.

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