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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing, and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. What is your opinion?

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A great amount of skill workers who are working in
advanced field
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advanced fields
the advanced field
 of careers
such
 as engineering, information technology and healthcare are relocating from underdevelopment to
development
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developed
 countries. While some people consider that
development
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developing
 countries are trying to again the human
resourses
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 from underdevelopment countries, others look at it just same as a normal transition of labour demand all over the world. In my opinion, I totally agree with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 opinion that
this
 movement happens naturally everywhere. Most the talent workers tend to look for a job at corporate
headquarters which
Accept comma addition
headquarters, which
 normally based in
development
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developing
developed
 countries in order to develop all their abilities and move up in
corporate ladder
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the corporate ladder
.
Although
 almost all giant companies have their representatives or subsidiaries in every
countries
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country
 around the world, some functions e.
g
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G
 manufacturing or research and
development
, are seldom established in poor
countrie
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 even still some jobs in the field of sales and marketing, anyway those may not fit with their qualification and educational background.
For example
, Apple’s Research and
Development
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
is based
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are based
 in California
therefore
 an IT engineer works in
this
 field, he would need to relocate to there. Working in the
development
 countries
also
 helps talent people earn a salary that they could never
been
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be
dream
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dreamt
 in their poor country. In the
development
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developed
developing
 countries, there always has a regulated
minimun
the least possible
minimum
 wage the workers can earn, and the amount could be higher four or five times than in their homeland. There will be no any circumstance which employers try to pay them as less as they can. An Indian surgeon who is working in San Jose
Hosiptal
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Hospital
 could be paid approximately $250,000 per year. If he works in Mumbai, he might gain only 20 percent of that amount. In conclusion, job relocations from underdevelopment to
development
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developed
 countries are
happened
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happening
 naturally by the demand
of
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for
 skilled workers. Almost the talents are looking for a better position in the corporate ladder or a better working
invironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 where they can show off all their capabilities
besides
 getting the best compensation. Those just can be fulfilled in the
development
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developing
developed
 country.
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