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Many people think that regions affect a successful person. What is your opinion about the native region and accomplished person’s influence on the region he belongs to?

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The
region
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 a
person
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 grows up in doesn’t entirely affect the success of that
person
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.
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, it does have an
influence
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 on how social skills develop during childhood and adolescence. We all understand the importance of having leadership and teamwork skills for a successful career. The native
region
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 plays an integral part
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of
 a
person
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 to acquire these. It is the biggest factor that contributes towards an accomplished
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person’s
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 success. Other than
this
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, the
region
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 earns popularity when a
person
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 belonging to it, earns fame and recognition worldwide. To talk about these factors separately;
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, Native
region
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’s
influence
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 on an accomplished
person
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: A
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person’s
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 native land can affect the
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person’s
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;  Leadership, teamwork and other social skills.  Character, opinions and attitude.  Education, passion and profession. The availability of modern educational tools and up-to-date resources for study in the native
region
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 determines the quality of education a
person
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 receives, and the career a
person
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 takes up.
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, Accomplished
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person’s
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influence
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 on the
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region he
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region, he
 belongs to Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg and Steve Jobs can be considered as best examples to explain the fact that accomplished people popularize their native
region
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 as they become famous. These are people who grew up in places that built their skills in technology and
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 they are an inspiration to the future generations of their hometown. Keeping these facts in mind, let’s not forget that
success
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the success
 of a
person
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 is
also
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 dependent on hard-work and persistence. The environment and people around can have an
influence
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, but turning that into an accomplishment would depend upon how determined a
person
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 is.

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