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Some believe that unpaid community service for example, working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger ones, should be a compulsory part of high school programme.

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It has often been a moot point whether voluntary charity programs,
such
 as improvising the neighbourhood or tutoring younger children in sports, ought to be made mandatory in high
school
 curriculum. I totally agree with unpaid
community
service
 being made compulsory in high
school
 as it offers several benefits.
To begin
 with, it is seen that not only theoretical knowledge but
also
 a child’s sensitivity to moral responsibilities, like free
community
service
,
are
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is
 critical to a successful career. Involvement in
such
 roles, allows juveniles to acquire and imbibe moral values and requisite life skills of communication, shouldering responsibilities, empathy and foresight amongst others.
For instance
, Sunder Pitchai
,
Accept space
,
 a top executive
in
Suggestion
at
 Google, picked up soft skills and confidence after engaging in free
community
service
 programmes in his higher secondary classes, due to which he was proffered a job amongst hundreds of applicants.
Additionally
, mandatory social
service
 with no payments by pupils at high
school
, helps them in obtaining admission in a good university
.
Accept space
.
This
 sets them apart from other aspirants making them outshine others, for enrolling into tertiary education or employment later, due to their contact with the ground reality.
Moreover
,
such
 work renders them sensitive to societal needs, making them good members of society. Proponents of the opposite view, argue that compulsory unpaid
community
service
 by high
school
 students, will only add up to their existing academic pressure. They believe that
such
school
 goers will not be able to complete their
home work
preparatory school work done outside school (especially at home)
homework
, assignments or studies that would adversely impact grades. To conclude, I opine that incorporating obligatory non-paid
community
service
 in high
school
 curriculum would no doubt be a catalyst in the career path of
school
 children, since it moulds their personality positively and makes them responsible citizens.
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