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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Opinions differ from person to person and there are many who think that changing career once in a lifetime is a better option than hanging onto
one
. I firmly disagree with
this
 opinion as it is a choice we make in our early youthful years and aim to strive towards it.
To begin
 with, we evaluate our career choices while we are doing our secondary education.
In other words
, our bachelor studies are based upon our future goals we aim to pursue and see ourselves acquiring a certain position in upcoming years.
Moreover
, some people
also
 enrol in courses which will enhance their abilities and skills for their aspiring jobs.
For example
, computer engineers have to study bachelors of computer science in order to gain a
job
 in
Information technology sector
Suggestion
the information technology sector
the Information technology sector
.
Similarly
, a doctor will require a degree to practice. Clearly, it takes years to get skilful and indefinite efforts to attain knowledge in a specific domain.
Furthermore
, taking up different kinds of jobs will not be beneficial in
long run
Suggestion
the long run
. There is a well-known adage which goes as “Jack of all and master of none”, it defines that if anyone attempts to learn everything might not ace even a single thing.
Additionally
, with years of experience at
one
job
 will help an individual to learn a lot more than switching to different jobs and learning
one
 skill with each
job
. In conclusion, mastering at
one
job
 with many skills is thought-provoking and brings a sense of confidence in an individual.
Therefore
, I strongly believe
this
 notion of sticking to
one
job
 rather than switching to do different jobs and exhausting resources and valuable time.
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