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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 is a wonderful invention, it is an interconnected network that has brought people closer from different parts of the
world
. Despite the fact that it helps in being in touch with our friends and family, it has, in my opinion, diminished meeting people in real than in
virtual
Suggestion
the virtual world
a virtual world
virtual worlds
world
. The fact that social media like Twitter, Facebook and Instagram helps us to be in contact with dear ones and even follow whom we
idolise
Suggestion
idolize
.
Thus
, we can call and message anytime we like. Free video calling has made it even easier for us to be present
at
Suggestion
in
 different places and communicate with friends and family.
Although
, we might be present in a different time zone and place we can make new friends, get updated about our acquaintances and follow our favourite celebrities and political leaders.
However
, the way of communication has become more digital and lacks personal emotions and touch.
For instance
, I have hardly met many of my friends in
past few months
Suggestion
the past few months
 with whom I regularly used to
hangout
Suggestion
hang out
. I am in contact with many of them via
messaging but
Accept comma addition
messaging, but
 seldom do I see them now. I guess none of us have realised that
online
Suggestion
the online world
world
 has fractured our friendships. We have become prisoners of
digital
Suggestion
the digital world
world
. We are more comfortable chatting than seeing people in person which in a way is the
first
 step to quarantine us from others.
Lastly
, I strongly agree though interconnected networks have increased communication virtually but it has reduced the physical interaction to a greater extent.
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