Fossil fuels (e.g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e.g. wind and solar) have been encouraged to be used by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

Almost in all
countries fossil
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countries, fossil
fuels are the major
source
for generating
energy but some
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energy, but some
advance
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advanced
countries have
plan
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plans
planned
to replace
this
limited sources with some sophisticated solution and renewable
energy
. Having lots of advantages and convenience to use, made fossil fuel the most popular way to generate
power
.
First
of all it is accessible and price wise it has a reasonable price and can generate
colossal amount
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the colossal amount
of
energy
which is not comparable with renewable or
clean
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cleaner
energy
,
for example
the distance that a car can travel with gas is much more than the distance can go by solar panel.
Secondly since
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Secondly, since
industrial revolution all machineries, industries,
power
plans and etc.
are
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Are
designed and made based on fossil fuels so every differences or changes has tremendous expenditure and require sophisticated technology which lots of countries cannot afford,
furthermore
another
source
of
power
that can address our demands
to
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of
energy
does not exist and current solutions neither have reasonable price nor can
response
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respond
to a little aspect of our need.
Although
this
traditional
fuels
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fuel
have
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has
some
benefits but
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benefits, but
they have some disadvantages too.
First
of all they are not inexhaustible and we have limitation in using so it is intellectual decision to consider a new substitute
source
.
Secondly these
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Secondly, these
old
source
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sources
of
power
have tremendous effect on
environment
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the environment
such
as air pollution, temperature increasing, increase oceans level due to melting polar ice, etc.
also we
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Also, we
Also we
have witnessed mounting rate of lung cancer and other diseases that threaten humankind live. So, obviously we should go towards some substitutes and replace fossil fuel with new one. And the best are renewable and clean energies
such
as ocean wave
,
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,
wind turbines
,
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,
solar plans and etc.
because
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Because
they are unlimited and they have no pollution so do not ruin our environment and
even are cheaper
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are even cheaper
in
long run
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the long run
and mass usage and they only need allocating budget and sophisticated technology which usually advance countries are pioneer in these ways. All in all
,
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,
shifting to some modern, innovative and revolutionary
power
plan
are
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is
inevitable but
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inevitable, but
it requires cooperating of all
countries especially
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countries, especially
advance and well-off countries which are pioneer and leader
.
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.
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