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1. Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this

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All facets of our life have been revolutionized by the advent of technology.
This
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 process has affected not only in our economical
manners but
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manners, but
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 in our banking systems. Today, using of cards
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 as credit and debit is so popular and it has many benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, the potential benefits of plastic
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 are undeniable.
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, these cards are more convenient of doing transactions from home than putting a huge amount of
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 in your wallet;
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 the risk of loss and theft could be minimized.
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, by using plastic
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, you can use of E-commerce marketing for online payments; as a matter of fact a lot of time and energy could be saved.
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, by using visa or debit cards, paper consuming and
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 notes could be decreased;
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, it can help
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the long term
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, there are several disadvantages
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of
 using plastic
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. One of the most significant
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ones
 is these cards may impose high-interest liability to their owners.
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, you have to pay to
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 extra
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 as accounts fee or additional service charges for your transactions.
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, having visa card often is responsible for impulsive shopping habits and destroy your
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 credit forever.
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, malicious hackers can access your
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 account to steal
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 by just hacking a number or
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security
 code. To sum up,
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, using credit and debit cards
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has
 a lot of advantages some measures as their drawbacks should be taken into account.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plastic money
  • Credit and debit cards
  • Banknotes
  • Coins
  • Transactions
  • Convenience
  • Security
  • Unauthorized transactions
  • Budget management
  • Financial apps
  • Acceptance
  • Global reach
  • Versatile
  • Dependence on technology
  • Technology malfunction
  • Privacy concerns
  • Data privacy
  • Data breaches
  • Overspending
  • Accumulating debt
  • High-interest rates
  • Fees
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