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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Big cities attract a lot of people looking for employment, studies or entertainment, Despite the list of benefits cities like New York, London or Paris can offer, they
also
 made their citizens face daily life problems. One of the main problems that cities can’t avoid is traffic. The number of cars driving through the roads
have increased
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has increased
had increased
 exponentially over years making people spent a lot of time to get to any destination.
This
lead
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leads
 us to the
second
 problem, public transportation is not sufficient for the amount of
population
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the population
 willing to use it, causing delays, accidents or the whole collapse of
transportation system
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the transportation system
transportation systems
. Both issues affect people’s life quality, a lot of hours lost, less family time, tired people, are just examples of the consequences.
Likewise
, pollution is another dramatic situation in big cities, the huge amount of industries and cars generating CO2 and toxic gases, and less green areas ready to capture it, are turning cities into dangerous places for
human’s
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human
 health.
Finally
, big cities are expensive, the price of food, rent, transportation and generally all basic expenses are much higher than small or intermediate cities,
hence
 people have to work more and harder to have a decent life. To
conclude I believe
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conclude, I believe
 a good solution to reduce problems and overpopulation in cities could be addressed by
government’s policies
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the government’s policies
 encouraging people to move to regional towns or smaller cities.
For example
, reducing taxes, subsidizing rents, stimulating Company’s to bring jobs and stable economy in those areas, could be ideas to promote migrations and lower the
problematics
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problems
problematic
 in the cities.
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