Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Rising edge
Suggestion
The rising edge
of Universities can be said as better
development but
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development, but
apparently it is not when there are numbers of graduated unemployed going around it is a serious concern and
this
essay intends to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
all optimistic and
prilimistic
nooks. Universities are the face of developed countries and gives student gratitude to face the world and to create his own
image but
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image, but
somehow situation is different today where people have stop trusting on the education because
maximum amount
Suggestion
the maximum amount
of
syllabus
Suggestion
the syllabus
is unimportant for companies and
that is
the eventual goal of plethora of students to get
better job
Suggestion
a better job
better jobs
in reward. It is
undenidable
not possible to deny
undeniable
that no industries will examine their knowledge about arts or history and everyone ask for practical knowledge to complete the work faster.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, it is said that only to focus on individual subject is a negative side of education. To make students able to do almost everything is
responsibiltiy
Suggestion
responsible
responsibility
of them and to connect them with art and history is no less than boon to them. Art is a benevolent practice to relax your
mind or
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mind, or
to enjoy your free time in banal situation, to understand different perception of nature and to increase their observing power it is good, Even to make them
respocible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for
nation
Suggestion
the nation
and to make them realize about ancient histories of their respective countries and to feel
pround
feeling self-respect or pleasure in something by which you measure your self-worth; or being a reason for pride
proud
of their
ancestores
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
and their sacrifices it is very essential. People must understand that to make their life
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
all these terms are imperative.
Study
Suggestion
A study
just to earn money would be foolish step and all these prospects are good to construct better personality and
this
all
are needed
Suggestion
is needed
to become a true gentleman. To recapitulate, it is irrefutable that masses are practical these days and wasting time is not accepted
thus
at one side selecting practical subjects to get opportunity is no
wrong but
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wrong, but
to make good impact being employee other subjects have paramount importance in daily life.
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