Nowadays,people are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks.Why do they do so? Suggest measures to solve the problem

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It is generally axiomatic that intake of sweetened beverages are burgeoned at an exponential pace among the folks due to mass media advertisements for the promotion of products and their life style.

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the masses

nd remedial measures to put a halt on it. To embark upon, a host of factors can be attributed to

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predilection towards the consumption of soft drinks among people. In the

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the existence

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mouth watering

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a predisposition

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a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

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the problem is not insurmountable. Numerous measures can be adopted to alleviate/mitigate consumer fascination towards these drinks. By educating individuals about the side effects of overdosing sugary products

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company will hike the cost of product

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will lower the consumption of drinks. Apart from it celebrities should acknowledge about the consequences of intake of sweetened drinks. To sum up, considering the aforementioned points, it can in

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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Nowadays,people are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks.Why do they do so? Suggest measures to solve the problem

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give opinions.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are requiered. Discuss both these views and your own opinion.

Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing. Some people think this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid. To what extent do you agree?