Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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television

for excessive amount of

time is better t

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an excessive amount

han reading a

book

for children.

Moreover

, is

this

the reason that children are less well-educated n

owadays?

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less good

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has it pros and cons. So

it is

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people say it is not and others are contradicting them with proper arguments and considerable result of researches done by prestigious organisations.

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agree

am agreeing

have agreed

l statements.

Firstly

television

were meant to be the

fastest,

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was meant

easiest, and economical source of information and it was, until recent times. Nowadays, children spend their

time

watching unnecessary stuff which is not useful to learn something new but

also

ruins their mindset.

However

television

also

provides worth watching programs but it is n

ot necessary

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programs, but

that child will watch that program. Plus the number of qualitative programs are

also

so much les

s t

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han the other rubbish sitcoms. Meanwhile, reading books take a large amount of concentration and

also

a stable mind.

In addition

, it

also

provides information which can be controlled by children's parents by giving proper Books with great plot.

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great plots

In contrast

, reading

book

takes a lot amount of

time

and efforts to learn something which can be done easily and almost effortlessly with the help of

television

. Even more, with the help of

television

you can have the photographs and videos whereas in

book

reading you need to imagine things which may not resembles the imagin

ation of

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resemble

the author.

However

book

reading takes

time

and efforts, it

also

teaches children their lesso

ns and make th

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children, their

eir mind stable plus concentrated.

Television

watching is not bad but it is good a

nd effe

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bad, but

ctive only if it can be done for limited

time

and

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der the inspection of elders.

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, in conclusion we can sa

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conclusion, we

book

reading as a learning tool is far more better than spe

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better

deal of

time

watching

television

, for children. And

that is

the reason why children are less well educated nowadays.

Sun Jan 26 2020

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