Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Recently,
this
has been a Revolutionary question as well as problem that if watching
television
for excessive amount of
time is better t
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an excessive amount
han reading a
book
for children.
Moreover
, is
this
the reason that children are less well-educated n
owadays?
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less good
Well,
this
has it pros and cons. So
me
it is
it's
people say it is not and others are contradicting them with proper arguments and considerable result of researches done by prestigious organisations.
thus
to understand t
he p
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Thus
roblem and to get appropriate solution here is the explanation for why I am agree to
this
wit
h logica
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agree
am agreeing
have agreed
l statements.
Firstly
,
television
were meant to be the
fastest,
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was meant
easiest, and economical source of information and it was, until recent times. Nowadays, children spend their
time
watching unnecessary stuff which is not useful to learn something new but
also
ruins their mindset.
However
,
television
also
provides worth watching programs but it is n
ot necessary
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programs, but
that child will watch that program. Plus the number of qualitative programs are
also
so much les
s t
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is
han the other rubbish sitcoms. Meanwhile, reading books take a large amount of concentration and
also
a stable mind.
In addition
, it
also
provides information which can be controlled by children's parents by giving proper Books with great plot.
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great plots
In contrast
, reading
book
takes a lot amount of
time
and efforts to learn something which can be done easily and almost effortlessly with the help of
television
. Even more, with the help of
television
you can have the photographs and videos whereas in
book
reading you need to imagine things which may not resembles the imagin
ation of
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resemble
the author.
However
,
book
reading takes
time
and efforts, it
also
teaches children their lesso
ns and make th
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children, their
eir mind stable plus concentrated.
Television
watching is not bad but it is good a
nd effe
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bad, but
ctive only if it can be done for limited
time
and
un
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in
der the inspection of elders.
Hence
, in conclusion we can sa
y
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conclusion, we
book
reading as a learning tool is far more better than spe
nding great
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better
deal of
time
watching
television
, for children. And
that is
the reason why children are less well educated nowadays.

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