Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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and efforts to learn something which can be done easily and almost effortlessly with the help of

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the reason why children are less well educated nowadays.

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