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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

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Health service
Suggestion
The health service
A health service
 is a very interesting topic and
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of people will have a mixed opinion about it.
However
, I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
 every country around the world should provide free basic medical facilities to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 people to help and support them.
Firstly
,
Nations which
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Nations, which
 are developing and underdeveloped have so many people under the poverty line and these people would need a basic support to be given to them by the government. If every country would come up with some sort of a basic plan to provide medical facilities to their citizens
this
 would be considered as a blessing. Futhermore, there are huge social organizations like the The world health project and united nations who are
funding poor
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funding, poor
 countries in the
african
a native or inhabitant of Africa
African
 continent to provide them with basic medical facilities.
For
example polio
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example, polio
 injections are given for free for kids who are under the age of 2. To conclude, My strong suggestion to have basic medical facilities to be
ptovided
on condition, with the understanding, if; usually followed by that
provided
 to all
people which
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people, which
 will in turn built a strong nation.

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