women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths an weaknesses, is it right to exclude male or female from certain professions because of their gender?

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Male and female have relatively different features,
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difference between gender maybe make men suitable for particular jobs
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and women suitable for
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
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jobs.
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my view, I tend to rule out men and women of some profession. Because the physical attributes prevent women from excelling
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sectors, and there are selective requirements disqualified men from holding distinct posts. There is no doubt that the physical strength is most significant qualification in some occupations, so women's try's to get specific jobs, which need high levels of physical ability, consider unreasonable.
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, the vast majority of women who choose to be a soldier, which as
profession
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a profession
can be stressful and involve
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working
under dangerous conditions, struggle with
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the heavy load
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occupation.
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, most of them have
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terminated
their jobs. ‌. Every profession requires basic knowledge, which sometimes referred to fundamental information, and good training to enter the workplace. But in some cases
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is not enough and additional skills are wanted.
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an illustration, dealing with children and understand their demands and needs in kindergarten is
hard task
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a hard task
for men, as opposed to women who is preferable in
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kind of work. In conclusion, men and women are characterize by different perspective and approaches in performance tasks, so it is important to get benefits of
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difference and put the right person in the right place

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