In many countries , women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of new born. do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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Undoubtedly
,
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,
maternity
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clothes leave is essential for
pragenant
carrying developing offspring within the body or being about to produce new life
pregnant
women. In many nations females are permitted to take leave
.
Accept space
.
There are benefits and drawbacks to it
.
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.
I believe that advantage supersede disadvantages. One significant
benefits
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benefit
is that
maternity
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leave
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leaves
helpful for
children growth
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a child's growth
child's growth
the child's growth
children's growth
child growth
.
In other words
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,
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mother
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the mother
give
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gives
full attention to
new
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the new
born so that children
growth
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grow
ameliorate.
For instance
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, survey by Boston university reveals that 60% of new
bron
that part of the central nervous system that includes all the higher nervous centers; enclosed within the skull; continuous with the spinal cord
brain
brand
born
development
depends
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depending
on
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mother
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the mother
.Another plus point of
maternity
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leave is that
new born
recently born
newborn
children can learn their native languages which is not thought by any nursery While it
can not
can not
cannot
be denied that some time
maternity
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leaves create career obstacles and
mother
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play vital role for earning money so that financial crises are
face
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the face
by
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of
their families.
However
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,
this
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can be easily overcome if
government
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the government
made rule to give wages.
Additionally
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, during
pregnancy women
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pregnancy, women
go through physical and mental stress so that
trast
have confidence or faith in
trust
transit
is
need
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needed
for better health of
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mother
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the mother
. In conclusion, I believe that benefits of
maternity
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leaves
are like development of children and better fitness of
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far like development of children and better fitness of mother outnumber
are like development of children and better fitness of mother far outnumbered
are like development of children and better fitness of mother far outnumber
mother
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far outnumber
then
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disadvantages.

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